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Some believe that money for education should mainly be spent on better computers while others believe it would be better spent on teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#believe #money #education #computers #teachers
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education plays a crucial role in people's lives teaching has altered a lot during these times. All the schools are getting modernized and institutions have been modifying their education techniques using recent technologies
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.It is asserted whether the money has to be used on
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 or
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 for studies. In
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 I will discuss both views and  give my opinion          
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 modern era,  recent technology plays an important role to promote educational processes.
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 implies that classrooms can be kept anywhere with technological availability.  
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,
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 get benefit from online classrooms, not only that but the
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 are more suitable in terms of time management.
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, during the pandemic situation
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 had to join or enter their classes with applications
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 as zoom.
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, it is important to encourage all
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 to access technology through 
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,
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 may get distracted as
computers
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 contain many stunning applications like Instagram and Facebook
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students
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 cant get diverted in presence of
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 .
teachers
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 have always been considered guides to
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.
teachers
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 are considered guides and mentors to the
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. Unlike
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, human
teachers
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 are excellent to guide
students
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 through their tough moments and for youngsters to learn and expand their skills and experiences.
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, if
students
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 have any problems in exams
teachers
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 can explain to them to solve the issue.
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,  qualified
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 are always required in teaching.  In ,
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conclusion I believe money should be spent equally on
teachers
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 and
computers
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 as they both play a significant role in our lives
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