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Scientists that computers will become more intelligent than human Some find it is a positive trend while others think it is a negative development. Discuss points and give your own opinion.

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Opinions are divided on whether the fact that human intelligence will by that of
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 is beneficial or harmful.
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 highly-intelligent
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 can assist humans in many ways, I am apprehensive about
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 development. Admittedly. many people champion the assistance of advanced
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, and justifiably so.
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 is machines could improve productivity as they could eliminate human involvement in the course of production and work tirelessly 24/7.
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, only employers seem to benefit from
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, while countless would be terminated, penalizing the vulnerable section of the human population.
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 with the ability to think critically and could help humans make sound decisions,
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 would create over-dependence, which would in turn have a stultifying effect on human intelligence.
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, with
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 intelligence, robots may start to make their own decisions, posing an existential threat to humankind.
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, with a certain set of beliefs and moral codes inserted, might a group of people or a religion should be eradicated for the greater good of the human race. From a logical standpoint, humans are, in essence, destroying the environment for the sake of economic growth, so it is reasonable to worry that a robot might decide that the best course of action is to wipe out human existence to protect the environment. These risks are too big for anyone to take, rendering the brought forth development unwelcome. In conclusion, engineering and AI technologies can surely enhance the quality of life, but the disadvantages of job losses, increased intellectual dependency on
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 and potentially existential threats to our own race can negate the aforementioned benefits.
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