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The plans show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map illustrates the changes that Porth Harbour have undergone since 2000. As can be seen, the whole place has turned into a more recreational area by adding places like a hotel, cafes and shops. Some parts of the harbour have remained unchanged.
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, the public beach which was situated in the northern part, the passenger ferries, or the lifeboat have not changed at all.
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, the car parks on the western side, have remained the same as they were in the year 2000.
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, there have been significant changes to the port.
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 of the biggest alternations is changing the disused castle into a hotel to accommodate the tourists, and
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, converting the public beach to a private
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 for visitors. Another improvement to the region is extending the dock which was smaller in 2000.
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, the marina and fishing boats which were situated on the western side, exchanged their locations. There used to be
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 area for showers and toilets which has been expanded to two locations. Two new roads have been added to the southern and western sides of the island, linking the lifeboat to the hotel and
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 of the car parks to the pre-existing road respectively.
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Ensure that the introduction and conclusion are distinct. While your essay has a good introduction, a concluding sentence summarizing the changes or overall impact could enhance the sense of closure.
logical structure
Continue to refine sentence structures for even greater clarity and connectivity between ideas. For instance, vary your sentence types to maintain reader interest and clarity.
complete response
The essay effectively summarizes the main features and changes to the harbour, providing a clear and comprehensive response.
logical structure
Logical progression of ideas and clear comparisons where relevant help maintain coherence across the essay.

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