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Some believe that nuclear weapons benefit the world at large. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that nuclear weapons are extremely beneficial for our world. To a certain extent, I agree that the armaments are helpful for human-being.
However
, I
also
 believe that the aforementioned military equipment is unbelievably dangerous. On the one hand, I confirm that fission weapons are to keep the earth safe.
That is
 to say, having access to the atomic bomb technology by some countries prevents devastating wars, because they clearly know that if they attack a country equipped with the weapon, it is probable the whole world be destroyed. It causes the fighting to be called off per se.
For example
, during the cold war, both the US and Russian governments had been armed with hydrogen bombs. They were threatening each other orally.
However
, being afraid of the destruction of the Earth, they did not start the bloodshed.
On the other hand
, these kinds of weapons are incredibly fatal. It means that if an army used the atomic bombs, it would demolish all live creatures of the region on the spur of moment. An infamous instance is the bombs which were employed by the American military in the Japanese cities of Nagasaki and Hiroshima at the time of the
Second
 World War. It was immensely harmful and led an overwhelming majority of innocent people to die. In conclusion, in my book,
although
 the existence of nuclear battle equipment plays an important role in preventing global wars, due to their high potential they are detrimental beyond belief.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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