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Online shopping has become more popular than before.discuss causes and effects of this trend.

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In the
last
 few decades, more people started to
use
 online shopping
such
 as Amazon than in the past. There are some advantages and disadvantages to buying goods on the Internet.
For example
, it is easy that they do not have to go to buy
products
.
However
, we might get worse quality
products
 than buying the
products
 in the store;
therefore
, these arguments will be important to understand for using these apps. First of all, there are some advantages of using online shopping. There are many varieties of
products
 in the shop online rather than in-store.
This
 means that even if we live in other countries it is possible to get the goods that are only sold abroad.
Furthermore
, It is easy to pay online shopping with a credit card with one click. So even for old people, it is easy for them to buy online.
However
, there are some disadvantages too. In online shops, we have to
use
 credit cards and by using
this
 some companies are going to scam.
This
 causes them to lose a lot of money.
Furthermore
, buying on the internet can not understand the time when the
products
 are going to arrive at the house so we can not get the goods until the day to
use
 them. Using these apps will be hard for elderly people who can not see very well and do not know how to
use
 electric devices so when they need something to buy they need more time to buy the
products
 than younger. In conclusion, in
this
 body sentence, I talked about the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping. In my opinion, These apps are very dangerous to
use
,
however
, in the future everyone will start to
use
 online shopping to buy but we have to be more careful about the scam and safety.
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task achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure that all parts of the prompt's question are answered comprehensively. Discuss both the causes and effects of the trend of online shopping's growing popularity.
coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your essay more logically by clearly separating points, using transition words, and making sure your ideas flow from one to the other seamlessly.
coherence cohesion
Back up your advantage and disadvantage points with more specific and relevant examples to strengthen your arguments and illustrate your ideas more clearly.
coherence cohesion
For a stronger introduction and conclusion, explicitly restate the topic and clearly outline your standpoint in the introduction while summarizing the main points in the conclusion.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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