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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own idea.

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Currently, advertising is becoming part of our life so a few groups of
people
 think that it encourages
people
 to purchase products, while others believe that we should ignore it. In my point of view, it is part of the business so we must avoid it. A number of crowds think that it encourages them of
this
 statement the
first
 and foremost is that a plethora of families after watching
such
 kind of advertising, they purchase it, due to do experience a new thing,
for instance
, whenever a new food items launch
then
 most
people
 want to try, owing to sharing the flavour of it.
Moreover
, numerous products which are not useful for them,
however
, they need to get it without any reason,
such
 as some items are not too amazing as their quality, even though
people
 are excited to get it, due to the publicity.
On the other hand
, advertising is a part of a company because
that is
 the only equipment which can introduce products without saying anything,
for instance
, after watching advertise they know about it and
then
 decide, we should purchase it or not.
Furthermore
,
people
 avoid it that it is the reason, numerous companies change their posters every year and they
also
 find new ways to attract the public,
for example
, a number of industries are changing their marketing, owing to the public reaction. In conclusion, the crowd have their own choice to choose the things,
therefore
 it is not controlled on their mind and
also
 ,in my opinion, it is a worse thing to attract
people
 to their side.
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