Some people think that children should be homeschooled when they are very young whioe others think it is better for them to attend a kindergarten. Which do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In
Change preposition
At
show examples
the elder
age
Add a comma
,age
show examples
children
can learn a lot of things
of
Change preposition
about
show examples
life.
education
play an
ensenchial
Correct your spelling
essential
role in human life.some people believe that learners can attend homeschool class,while other think that
kindergarten
is a better option for
students
that
Correct pronoun usage
I
show examples
will discuss both views in
further
paragraphs. On the one hand,
children
are going to
kindergarten
school
they can spend time with teachers and make new
students
.
School
Add an article
The school
show examples
has a better opportunity for the learner it provides insignificant kinds of
education
.
Furthermore
,
kindergarten
school
is beneficial for elder age
students
. Institute has many technical products. It
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
smart
classes
and gives smart
education
to the learner.
For example
, a survey conducted by BBC news channel
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
showed that the new generation has more knowledge about electric gadgets because they started for
education
in the smart class.
On the other hand
, when they
learns
Change the verb form
learn
show examples
home
Change preposition
at home
show examples
classes
they can face a lot of difficulties because they do not have many opportunities for
children
at
home
. These days parents have a hectic schedule they spend numerous time on work or
another kind
Fix the agreement mistake
other kinds
show examples
of work.
Moreover
,
home
classes
provide a pessimistic effect on
children
's
education
because parents don't have information on how to teach elderly
students
.
for instance
, according to the study, one student takes
home
classes
and
then
it regularly in
school
it is a week student at
school
. To conclude,
Home
classes
have beneficial for
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
poor family because they do not pay tuition fees.but, it provides a negative effect on
children
's
education
. Parents should try admission to
kindergarten
for a better future.
Submitted by kawankaur on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: