Many famous sports players advertise sports products. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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sports
is something usual nowadays, especially
it
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since it
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became so after the appearance of
sports
broadcasting. There are many arguments about the benefits and drawbacks of that, and in that essay,
it
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they
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will be explained thoroughly. There are many
types
of
sports
, some are more popular like soccer, others are less.
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all
of
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sports
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the sports
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have their own audience and
fans
, who are ready to buy special merchandise or advertised stuff in the
sports
events.
These
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money is crucial for many
types
of
sports
in
modern
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the modern
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day, even for those which have millions of strong
fans
throughout the world. One of
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is cybersport, it is a non-athletic and young, but still popular type of
sport
. Unsurprisingly, many authorities ignore gaming competitions and do not recognize
it
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them
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, so do not see any necessity to fund cybersports, like other
types
of
sports
.
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due to
enormous
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the enormous
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size of
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the fanbase
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fanbase
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fanbases
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, many gigantic international companies mainly from
food
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the food
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and gaming industry support
this
type of
sport
in exchange for
the
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advertisements from
the
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gaming clubs and teams.
Namely
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the biggest sponsors of cybersports are HyperX, Mountain Dew, Redbull,
Doritos
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and Doritos
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. Thanks to them
the
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cybersports is thriving and making
a
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big progress year by year. Despite
of
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that, there are
also
disadvantages of
sports
products
being advertised by famous players. When
fans
see the high and ideal performance of their favourite players and hear the words of their idols telling how the equipment from their sponsors improved their game, advertised
products
start to become some sort of
brand
, and special for
fans
. The light example is Air Jordan, the legend of basketball Michael Jordan wore and advertised it, and now it became a
brand
itself. It is bad for the
fans
, for the
company
and for the
sport
itself, as the product becomes a
brand
, the demand for it increases and so does the price.
In other words
,
product
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the product
a product
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becomes popular and expensive with no true improvement in
the
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quality. It boosts the stance of
company
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the company
a company
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in the market that makes
this
product, making it more powerful with no increase in competitiveness of the business.
Moreover
, if
this
occurs many times and simultaneously several
products
of the
company
become
brand
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brands
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,
then
it might lead to the result where the single
company
controls the whole market.
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example
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an example
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the
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Nike,
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is the
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the
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a
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company
that is
strongly linked with
the
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sports
shoes
, especially
for
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basketball, as it manufactures
the
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a
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whopping 90% of all basketball
shoes
. The hype around the
company
is so high, because of the legendary players wearing their
shoes
, that no one even
arguing
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argues
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with the quality of their
products
or the relevance of the price of their
shoes
. To conclude,
the
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advertising in athletics is
the
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common sight, and it has its own drawbacks and benefits. Sponsorship is one of the main sources of income for some sportsmen, while for some
types
of
sport
it brings
the
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a
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decline.
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