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Many famous sports players advertise sports products. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Advertisement in
sports
 is something usual nowadays, especially
it
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since it
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 became so after the appearance of
sports
 broadcasting. There are many arguments about the benefits and drawbacks of that, and in that essay,
it
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they
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 will be explained thoroughly. There are many
types
 of
sports
, some are more popular like soccer, others are less.
Nonetheless
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 all
of
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sports
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the sports
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 have their own audience and
fans
, who are ready to buy special merchandise or advertised stuff in the
sports
 events.
These
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This
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 money is crucial for many
types
 of
sports
 in
modern
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the modern
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 day, even for those which have millions of strong
fans
 throughout the world. One of
suchб
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the suchб
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 is cybersport, it is a non-athletic and young, but still popular type of
sport
. Unsurprisingly, many authorities ignore gaming competitions and do not recognize
it
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them
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, so do not see any necessity to fund cybersports, like other
types
 of
sports
.
However
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 due to
enormous
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the enormous
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 size of
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the fanbase
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fanbase
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fanbases
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, many gigantic international companies mainly from
food
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the food
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 and gaming industry support
this
 type of
sport
 in exchange for
the
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advertisements from
the
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gaming clubs and teams.
Namely
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 the biggest sponsors of cybersports are HyperX, Mountain Dew, Redbull,
Doritos
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and Doritos
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. Thanks to them
the
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cybersports is thriving and making
a
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big progress year by year. Despite
of
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that, there are
also
 disadvantages of
sports
products
 being advertised by famous players. When
fans
 see the high and ideal performance of their favourite players and hear the words of their idols telling how the equipment from their sponsors improved their game, advertised
products
 start to become some sort of
brand
, and special for
fans
. The light example is Air Jordan, the legend of basketball Michael Jordan wore and advertised it, and now it became a
brand
 itself. It is bad for the
fans
, for the
company
 and for the
sport
 itself, as the product becomes a
brand
, the demand for it increases and so does the price.
In other words
,
product
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the product
a product
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 becomes popular and expensive with no true improvement in
the
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apply
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quality. It boosts the stance of
company
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the company
a company
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 in the market that makes
this
 product, making it more powerful with no increase in competitiveness of the business.
Moreover
, if
this
 occurs many times and simultaneously several
products
 of the
company
 become
brand
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brands
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,
then
 it might lead to the result where the single
company
 controls the whole market.
As
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example
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an example
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the
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Nike,
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is the
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the
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a
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company
that is
 strongly linked with
the
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sports
shoes
, especially
for
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basketball, as it manufactures
the
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a
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 whopping 90% of all basketball
shoes
. The hype around the
company
 is so high, because of the legendary players wearing their
shoes
, that no one even
arguing
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argues
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 with the quality of their
products
 or the relevance of the price of their
shoes
. To conclude,
the
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advertising in athletics is
the
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a
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 common sight, and it has its own drawbacks and benefits. Sponsorship is one of the main sources of income for some sportsmen, while for some
types
 of
sport
 it brings
the
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a
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 decline.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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