Recent advances in medicine have resulted in an increase in life expectancy over the past four years. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
The latest development in
medicine
helped many human lives
expectancy in Change the noun form
life
last
four years as per the survey. I would agree that there are Correct article usage
the last
lot
of advantages than Change the article
a lot
the
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apply
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disadvantages
disadavantages
in Correct your spelling
disadvantages
development
of modern Correct article usage
the development
medicine
. The formost
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foremost
advantages
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advantage
is
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are
treatment
of Add an article
the treatment
cancer
and organ transplantations.
In early times, The people
who were affected by the
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apply
cancer
isolated
and Add a missing verb
were isolated
Majority
of them died because they did not have the proper medication and guidance at that time. Correct article usage
the Majority
People
were afraid to talk with the
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cancer
patients they were
blindly believed that they Unnecessary verb
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also
would get the disease but Correct your spelling
now days
nowdays
there are Correct the word
nowadays
lot
of social programs Change the article
a lot
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by the government to educate Wrong verb form
arranged
the
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people
about cancer
and not to
ignore Fix the infinitive
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the
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cancer
patients. Moreover
, the recent improvement in medicine
technology to find out the symptoms too early to cure the disease as well as treat the disease became very easy. It was Replace the word
medical
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a lack
the lack
lack
in the early period of time.
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lacking
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addition
additon
, organ Correct your spelling
addition
transplantions
helps many Correct your spelling
transplantations
transplantation
transplants
people
to start their life once again,
Because Remove the comma
apply
people
were used to live
their whole life with Change the verb form
living
diabilties
like without legs, hands, and eyes. Correct your spelling
disabilities
People
were used commit
suicide Fix the infinitive
to commit
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because
becuase
they could not accept their disabilities. Correct your spelling
because
However
, In Present times people
can easily do
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the
implant Correct article usage
apply
the
artificial organs. If someone tragically Correct article usage
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loss
their organs in Replace the word
loses
accidents
they can easily get Fix the agreement mistake
accident
the
organ Correct article usage
apply
transplations
.
To conclude Correct your spelling
translations
transplantations
this
topic, I strongly agree that the recent developments in medicine
improved the
life expectancy and the advantages outweigh the disadvantagesCorrect article usage
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