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Some people believe that universities should offer free education to all students, while others think that students should pay for their education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #universities #offer #education #students
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There is a debate about whether
universities
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 should offer free
education
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 to all
students
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 but others think that
students
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 should pay for their
education
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 .
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both
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 views have some value , I believe that
universities
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 should have
both
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 paid and free
education
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 so in
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 essay I will discuss
both
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 views and I will show my own opinion. Some
people
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 believe that
universities
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 should provide
education
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 free for all
people
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. They argue that all
people
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 are equal to have the same
chance
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instead
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 of their capabilities.
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, there are smart and talented
students
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 who face poverty so they cannot study and have a good environment to develop their skills .
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, giving the
chance
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 for all
people
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 will grow the economy by providing a good career for all to work and build their countries.
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,
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 will support new generations to focus on their own skills.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 who think
students
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 should pay for their
education
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. They believe that
students
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 who spend their money on learning have better responsibility and security so they will work hard to keep
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chance
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 and avoid any mistakes that make them lose
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 place.
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, putting restrictive factors to join the
universities
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 will reduce
students
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' numbers so it decreases the capacity of the
universities
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 and helps them to use the resources on the most serious
students
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 and gain better results.
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 leads to an increase in the quality of
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 by offering effective places to practice and learn. In my opinion, the
universities
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 should balance between two ideas by making
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 pay but making it cheap and offering scholarships for special
students
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.
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 will increase the quality and reach
students
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 from different societies who deserve
this
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chance
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. In conclusion,
while
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 some
people
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 think that
universities
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 should make
education
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 pay or not, I believe
both
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 should be involved but by balancing between them.
This
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 way
students
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 will get an equal
chance
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 without increasing the capacity of the
universities
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.
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complete response
The essay provides a well-balanced discussion of both perspectives.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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