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In any field — business, politics, education, government — those in power should step down after five years. Do you agree?

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Some communities believe that the
leaders
 of business, politics, education or any
sector
 should not work for more than
five
years
.
This
 method is helpful for everybody in society from an individual to the industry. In my view, I agree with the given statement because
this
 approach will lead to fresh growth in every
sector
. On the one side, From earlier days to the present day, most
leaders
 are entrepreneurs with multiple skills. Entrepreneurs will develop society and technology with manifold ideas,
moreover
 when a fresh individual is given a
chance
 to develop their working
sector
then
 there will be fresh development in every
sector
. And it is better to step back from their role after
five
years
 because
leaders
 will be bored and don't have any new ideas to advance their sectors.
For instance
, In politics, after every
five
years
, there will be a
chance
 for communities to elect their
leaders
. I think it is one of the best solutions to develop their country.
Secondly
, In Industries, it is better to replace their
leaders
 after
five
years
. In the Industries, multiple products are produced, so by replacing their leader fresh products will be generated which is helpful to develop their organization. With
this
 approach, every industry will get a
chance
 to generate fresh products with manifold ideas. To sum up, It is the best way to leave their profession as a leader after
five
years
. In
this
 way, individuals, government, and every person in the society will get a
chance
 to develop their nation.
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