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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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and maybe that opinion helps to
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secondly
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 if we interact with another researcher they may provide their
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 and it was a kindly relation between
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, maybe other
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 our levels of activity.
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people
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, maybe they do not believe
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 they think that
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 of that are not correct.
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, it is possible that someone achievable the
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, more
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 to achieve it.so for the valuable things we should
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 appropriate price. In
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people
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 with giving their results
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 conclusions to another for
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 believe that they should not provide their work and study without any price ,and I
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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