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in some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.

#countries #home #people
We are witnessing something that’s not that new to
the
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mankind. Many people would love to have some place of their own, as a
home
, to feel safe and secure and surely that desire hasn’t changed a lot
during
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 time.
In
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contrary
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 there are people out there who strongly believe that quote which indicates that
home
 is a feeling,
home
 is where you are beside your loved ones and it’s definitely beyond a building. But the main question is, which notion is better? Is there a negative or a positive situation in
this
 case? As a person who
live
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 in one of the
third world
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 countries, having a
home
by
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 my own will give me the feeling of comfort and safeness without a doubt,
besides
, here, we consider it as a kind of investment, meaning you can live in it or you can put it on the market for sale or even rent, either
ways
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 will give you benefits.
in
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contrary
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,
this
 feeling of attachment to a building, city or even a country, somehow will tie your hands and legs and sooner or later you will figure
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out that you’ve wrapped yourself with invisible hokes and strings. You can not pursue your dreams, you can not live your life properly,
you
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 may probably ignore all the opportunities one by one. To what? To the feeling of
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attachment to your house. So
with
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considering all these, situations like these
has
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to
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two
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 sides, like a coin, a win or a
lose
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 side. In my
opinion
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this
 depends on each person’s situation. In some places having a
home
 is a win and
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in other
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 places could be a real loss!
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