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Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In our post-industrial society - money is the most valuable instrument. It is believed, that today’s
students
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 should have knowledge abouthow to survive during the capitalism, about financial literacy, acquired from
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. I am strongly in favour of it.
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, it is necessary for the reason that
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 after graduating are not ready for adult life. They are non-known about earning money, so, they make mistakes, which causes slow development of their career.
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, if person learn crucial financial skills at
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, he or she would be absolutely more successful in future life. Let’s compare two employees:
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one
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 have been taught by teachers about financial literacy, and
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one
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, who just graduated from
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 and does not know anything about money. Which
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 is more perspective? Of course, the
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.
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 huge benefit – if student is taught about
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 useful information from yearly ages, he can be financial independent already at age 17-18. It is sounds great, is not it? Indeed, student get not only clues about finances, yet he
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 get strong motivation for
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, I would affect not only consequence of studying finance for only
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, though
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 for whole world. We can count so many benefits: Young people too will improve country’s economics, there almost will not be that critical world’s problem,
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 as unemployment and homelessness. To conclude, I want to reiterate: I strongly believe, that all
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 should teach
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 about financial literacy.
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