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Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In our post-industrial society - money is the most valuable instrument. It is believed, that today’s
students
 should have knowledge abouthow to survive during the capitalism, about financial literacy, acquired from
school
. I am strongly in favour of it.
Firstly
, it is necessary for the reason that
students
 after graduating are not ready for adult life. They are non-known about earning money, so, they make mistakes, which causes slow development of their career.
However
, if person learn crucial financial skills at
school
, he or she would be absolutely more successful in future life. Let’s compare two employees:
first
one
 have been taught by teachers about financial literacy, and
second
one
, who just graduated from
school
 and does not know anything about money. Which
one
 is more perspective? Of course, the
first
one
.
Second
 huge benefit – if student is taught about
this
 useful information from yearly ages, he can be financial independent already at age 17-18. It is sounds great, is not it? Indeed, student get not only clues about finances, yet he
also
 get strong motivation for
Finally
, I would affect not only consequence of studying finance for only
students
, though
additionally
 for whole world. We can count so many benefits: Young people too will improve country’s economics, there almost will not be that critical world’s problem,
such
 as unemployment and homelessness. To conclude, I want to reiterate: I strongly believe, that all
school
 should teach
students
 about financial literacy.
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