Throughout history, people have dreamt of living in a perfect society. However, there is still no agreement about what a perfect society would be like. Why do people want to turn this dream into a reality? What can people do to help create an ideal society?
After world war two, so many changes
taken
place, like people’s lifestyle, eating habits, social Wrong verb form
took
life
and businesses; It has taken many things away from Use synonyms
Correct your spelling
humankind
human kind
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humankind
Linking Words
for
instance, home, food, education and joy Add the comma(s)
,for
life
. Use synonyms
Peoples
great Change noun form
People's
achievement
for predecessors were food, education, clothes, shelter and job with average wages. Fix the agreement mistake
achievements
However
, Linking Words
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present-day
present day
things got changed in every aspect, everybody has their own expectations and dreams to chase. To make dreams come true every single Add a hyphen
present-day
individuals’
contribution is mandatory. I will elaborate on the same in Change noun form
individual’s
coming
paragraphs.
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the coming
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with, for every individual, to live Linking Words
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a happy
happy
and quality Change the adjective
happily
life
a flawless Use synonyms
society
is pretty much required. As there is no particular definition Use synonyms
regard
to perfect Wrong verb form
regarding
society
, even though, Use synonyms
perfect
Add an article
a perfect
society
would Use synonyms
consists
, Change the verb form
consist
nice
dwellings, superior hospital services, transportation Change preposition
of nice
well organized
system, job opportunities with higher wages and many more. A perfect Add a hyphen
well-organized
community
offers Use synonyms
polished
and secure Correct article usage
a polished
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lifestyle
life style
. Elegant communities can Correct your spelling
lifestyle
also
deliver tidy Linking Words
neighborhood
, 24/7 hospital services and Fix the agreement mistake
neighborhoods
structured
study Correct article usage
a structured
environment
.
Indeed, to create Fix the agreement mistake
environments
perfect
Add an article
a perfect
the perfect
society
, civilians must grow, Use synonyms
for example
, citizens must be literate , skilled, Linking Words
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and expertise
expertise
in their respective fields; and Replace the word
experts
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everybody
every body
should work and pay taxes to Correct your spelling
everybody
government
. Add an article
the government
In addition
to Linking Words
that
all members Add a comma
,that
in
Change preposition
of
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community
must help each other and treat equally. Every person Add an article
the community
a community
take
responsibility and Change the verb form
takes
provide
free Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
community
services Use synonyms
against
lowered class people, Change preposition
to
eventually
it leads to Add a comma
,eventually
raise
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a raise
Use synonyms
community
.
To conclude, as mentioned above, to make dreams become true to live in Add an article
a community
perfect
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a perfect
community
and lead Use synonyms
life
, civilians have to do their part by working and paying taxes and Use synonyms
follow
rules and regulations made by Government. If Government is wealthy and strong communities can be developed and Wrong verb form
following
serve
better.Wrong verb form
served
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