IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

Many people these days choose to work abroad after graduation. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages.

#people #work #graduation #trend
Recently, individuals are in an easy agreement on utilising their skills right after college, and
moreover
, the firms who hire
such
 students
also
 tend to see the benefits of recruiting new talents
instead
 of spending money on headhunting. My beliefs are in clear favour of working where you studied.
First
, in order to study in a foreign country, it is safe to assume that a huge chunk of money and time has been invested by the respected ones.
Hence
,
this
 becomes an elementary decision to make where the students would like to make the most of their time and the currency is involved.
Therefore
, it explains the ongoing trend of not going back to the origin country and spending some time working in a land where their resources are already in some form of engagement.
For example
, a recent survey indicates more than 70% of young ones choose to put their efforts into finding a job right after the completion of their courses, in the hope of reaping the rightful rewards for their actions.
In addition
, it is in our innate nature to explore the culture, people and area. People who have a strong opinion on the ones who decide to work abroad are mostly from the other side of the road, and even if, we understand from where it is coming, still, we should take it with a pinch of salt and should not undermine the values of the experience working away from your homeland. In conclusion, all the arguments could be in favour of contributing their skills for which they had been trained in a foreign land, we should not disregard the folks who go back to their countries to serve them respectfully.
Submitted by patel.nirav100 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: