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There is an increasing trend of antisocial behavior by individuals and in most cases it is blamed on society. How can society be the blame? What needs to be done about these people?

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The world is witnessing a spurt in misbehavioural and
unrespectful
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 attitudes. There is a large number of reasons that should be taken seriously;
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, some causes
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 as general upbringing as well as dysfunctional
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 will be discussed in
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, some possible solutions will be given.
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 of all, to address the cause of antisocial behaviour, individuals simply need jobs. People without professions will behave in an aggressive manner. More importantly, their pent-up anger will lead to disrespectful behaviour.
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, some individuals have been brought up in
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 with poor conditions.
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, they have not been taught social morals in an appropriate way and end up reflecting the same inappropriate behaviour in their society. Some feasible solutions would be,
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, for governments should provide job opportunities for eligible people who are seeking for being employed.
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 chance should be equivalently given to both men and women. If adults can find suitable occupations,
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 they will be more respectful to each other.
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, some well-developed European countries are good examples of
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 issue with low crime rates.
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, authorities should be sensitive to low-income
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 living in poor conditions. They should support them in terms of sending their children to school even though children in rich
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 might be involved in juvenile delinquency. To conclude, to overcome
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 matter of unacceptable conduct regime must take preventive measures, including importing work options and ensuring proper schooling.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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