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These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults.

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There is no doubt that these days transferring to cities is the most controversial in the world. In
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 case and will write down my point of view . On the one hand, The
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 who argue with
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 case has beneficial. their opinions stand on that the best way to develop themselves and there are many reasons.
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, Many universities exist and they can find better institutes or schools.
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, They have a chance to study and work at the same time.
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. It is not easy to find a job
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 time. And that life costs much. but
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 community is better for
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 to know each other,
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 they trust their areas and it is very difficult to go away. that clearly that more and more
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 move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults. On other hand, others believe that villages now can study online and they can get anything they want via the internet.
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, The world became a small city. The most advantage is that living expenses are less than in big towns.
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, Health care is better and there are many choices for everything .these
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 always looking for development. In my conclusion, After analysing both viewpoints. It is clear to simply
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 case I think life is easy in huge cities than in small because you can find all life aspects in an easy way
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 as. the study, health, and work.
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