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Some people think it is not necessary for adults to receive education in class. Self-study is a good way for them to study more effectively. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

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A certain person believes there is no need for any specific
class
 of
education
 for mature
students
,they can study themself more effectively.In my opinion, I strongly believe that every adult should go to the
class
 for the
lesson
 in their
education
.In
this
 ,
an
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essay I discuss why
students
 should take
classes
 for their studies gets more effect on their lives. There are many reasons,why
students
 go to the
classes
 and the lectures are beneficial for their future and gaining knowledge.
firstly
,they get concentration and focus on the study.If scholar took the
class
 of lecturer they would be given attention about
lesson
,on the other ,hand if they studie them self in home,they would not get any focus to study.,
Secondly
 who did not take the
class
 faced any difficult
lesson
 on how can they solve it, and they did not get the solution,
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 the taken
class
 ask questions to the teacher and easy to solve all kinds of problems.
Thirdly
,when
students
 start self-study,they get careless about their studies because nobody asks any questions about their
lesson
.learners get more time to go to work and earn money,when they started earning money than they are more distracted by their studies.fourthly, those who go the
education
 get feedback on their any wrong decision of solving the problem.teacher can easily find their weakness and make no stick in perspective by their teaching. The sum up,I go the favour of taking the
class
 to every adult should take
classes
 for their bright forthcoming and strong knowledge.they get higher confidence in their ultimate work on basis of their strong
education
.so every adult should go the
classes
 taking
classes
 and get confidence in their bright imminent.
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