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Many people are working longer and longer hours. What are the reasons and effects?

#people #hours #effects
In
this
 modern world,
work
 is essential to earn a living and
to
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survive. We are observing that many
people
 are working longer and longer
hours
 today. We will discuss
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further
further in
furtherin
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further
about
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apply
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the reasons and
its
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their
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 effects.
Firstly
,
people
work
 long
hours
in
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 the aim of getting more money.Lots of
people
 are
unfortunately
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,unfortunately
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, getting a very low salary which is not enough to support their family and they have no other choices
to
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but to
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work
 overtime and gain some surplus money. Obviously, when these
people
work
 longer
hours
, they neglect their
family
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families
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 and are extremely overwhelmed,
thus
 they may have health issues.
Secondly
, today, some companies are reducing their resources,
thus
 the load of
work
 stays the same,
therefore
 the existing employees feel obliged to
work
 overtime to achieve their target or commitment. In many
countries
, when parents
work
 long
hours
, family and children feel neglected, leading to misunderstanding in the family. There are many
countries
 where globalization is happening, unfortunately, these
countries
 do not have enough workforce due to an ageing population who does not want to have children. So,
people
needs
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 to
work
 hard , but, on the other side until all these jobs are filled, many
countries
 are considering immigration to alleviate the workload of these
people
. In conclusion, working long
hours
 is bad for
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an
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and
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an
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 individual. The government should impose strict laws for
people
 to have a
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work-life
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work life
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work-life
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 balance so that
one
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they
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 can enjoy
some
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a
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 good time with their family.
Additionally
, all
countries
 should set a fixed minimum salary which will allow a decent salary for some
people
 to support their
family
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families
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 without the need to
work
 long
hours
.
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