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Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views. Which view do you agree with? explain why?

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There is some debate about the availability of higher
education
 among
students
. Some open that there should be space for all the
students
 in college or university while others suggest that they should only enrol good
students
.
This
 essay will discuss both views and gives an opinion. I, personally, side with the latter view. Those who say that higher
education
 should be common for all give their reasons as follow.
Firstly
, they depict that
education
 is the fundamental right of a man. So, we cannot deprive anyone to get higher
education
. They
also
 believe that
education
 will open up many opportunities so that they can get a good job to lead a good life. They
further
 think that basic qualities will be developed among people which is key to creating an advanced civilization through top degrees.
On the other hand
, there is some contrast with those views.
Students
 who are not so good in the learning process can keep the piece of my
education
 as those system seems so hard to them. So, we could the
students
 will not achieve the expected results that's why they will not get a good job. Sometimes, they might be depressed and some of them can commit suicide.
Besides
,
students
 with low scores are nothing but increasing unemployment. Whereas, some sectors
such
 as automobile, agriculture, medical representatives, pharmacy, and so on are not finding skilled workers. we only have a gigantic number of clumsy young people with high degrees. So, some
students
 who are not qualified for higher
education
 should have been trained properly so that we can gain a skilled generation. To conclude, basic
education
 should be free for all but higher
education
 must be confined to those who are worthy enough.
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