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Young people should do voluntary work in their free time. Do you agree or disagree?

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children were expected to be one who joins in voluntary activities because they have more time than other generations.
In contrast
, there are many
people
 who disagree with
this
 idea
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 everyone should take it an account for it.
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 will be discussed in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with time, the charity activities
such
 as building construction required a long time to be completed.
For example
, I joined a voluntary camp when I was at university. I and my friend went to Tak province to build a canteen for a school in the rural area. It took 1 month to completely build a building, we spend the whole vacation. As the timeline of
this
 activity is quite long, so it is impossible for working
people
 to take a holiday longer than 1 month. So children are the group of
people
 who is suitable to participate in community services.
On the other hand
,
this
 should not be only a responsibility for the young but everyone in society should lend his hand in. To illustrate, most children have a limited financial budget because they are unemployed, so they are unable to donate to charity as much as they demand.
However
, the government should be responsible to allocate the budget to improve the life quality of the
people
 who lack an opportunity.
Moreover
, the government should regulate
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tax refund for charities to encourage
people
 to donate money. To sum up,
this
 should not be the responsibility of anyone in the country, but if the government and
people
 hold each other hands to change the society together.
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