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Of late, it is believed that students studying in secondary school and high school should be taught how to manage money as it is an important life skill. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this argument? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Money
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 plays a pivotal role in everybody's
life
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. Some communities say that students who are pursuing secondary
education
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 and high studies should learn the skill to manage
money
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 because it is one of the important
life
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 skills to save
money
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 in their
career
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. I strongly agree with the given statement.
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, In
this
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 essay, I will discuss some reasons according to my opinion and
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 I will give some relevant examples. On the one side, Communities who are studying in secondary schools and higher schools are adults who have the maturity to understand situations and problems. If the
education
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 system provides them with knowledge by teaching them how to manage their
money
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 based on their requirements
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 they will learn some important skills to balance their
career
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 with savings. In some countries, the
education
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 system teaches students about savings and balancing their
life
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 with work and family.
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, My brother went to abroad study in the USA, where they will be taught about how to save their incomes and
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 provide part-time jobs in their college to meet their basic needs.
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, In my view, secondary school students have some idea about their
career
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 and their financial status so by teaching them about managing
money
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 in their
life
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 it will be useful to them to support their family based on their financial status.
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, My friend has great knowledge of managing
money
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 because she always wants to help her parents by using the
money
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 for necessary things and
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 on her birthday she doesn't waste
money
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 on eating fast food but she brings homemade healthy food for all of my friends. To sum up, In my view is the optimum way to teach about managing
money
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 in secondary schools. The government and
Education
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 system should look after
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 course about managing
money
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 because
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 will help communities to lead balanced
life
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 without financial problems in their
career
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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