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In some countries, some criminal trials in law courts are shown on television so that the general public can watch. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that people in some countries can watch some criminal
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 live on TV.
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 I acknowledge the benefits of
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 decision, they are outweighed by its problems. The advantages of televising
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 on a casual basis are indeed in plain sight.
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,
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 shows, theoretically, were started with a view to informing adults, and children alike, of how the judicial system works. Obviously, the more knowledgeable one is about the criminal justice system, the less likely he or she is to commit an unlawful act. Reports have suggested that
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 shows are cost-effective ways for the authorities to enforce the law and deal with the escalating crime rate, as the information provided in the show can deter would-be offenders.
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, since most citizens have doubts about the effectiveness of their country’s justice system, televised
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 are perhaps a way to allow more transparency in the judicial branch of the government. Despite the positives mentioned above, the negative ramifications of allowing cameras in the courtroom are far more significant. Flashing lights and camera lenses may put the judge, who must always be of sound mind, off his stride and
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 affect his judgements.
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, the final verdict given by the judge decides whether the defendant is guilty or not and may be affected
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 the presence of cameras.
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, after all the editing,
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 shows have become entertainment shows, failing to deter criminals or they might become a tool for the authorities to manipulate the viewers, precluding transparency rather than promoting it. In conclusion, streaming criminal
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 on TV might be beneficial,
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 in the form of informing the public and making judicial procedures more transparent.
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 shows might serve as nothing short of entertainment or even a means of manipulation, and so these potential problems negate the aforementioned benefits.

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task achievement
Your essay addresses the prompt well, weighing both the advantages and disadvantages. To score higher in Task Response, consider providing more specific examples or case studies to bolster your argument.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your essay is good, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, you could improve the flow between some sentences and paragraphs, ensuring smoother transitions.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are clear and effectively frame the essay.
task achievement
You have good main points that are well-supported with explanations.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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