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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
When
people
 going another
country
 which has a different
language
 , they can't speak with there native languages so they should be able to speak that different
language
 well.
However
 they have some problems ,and I agree with
this
 opinion. On the one hand, when
people
 went to a foreign
country
 where
people
 speak different languages , if they
don’t
 know the new
language
 well ,
firstly
 ,it is possible that they have some mistake in their speaking and maybe they can't get their point across, for
instead
 , when the going to market to buy something for breakfast they can't say which they need because they
don’t
 know names of something that want.
secondly
 , in their interaction with
people
 of that
country
 may use a phrase which has a bad meaning in their
culture
 and it is not good.
Finally
, when they can speak well they have to bring a person who is a translator and they should pay money for a translator which possible be expensive.
On the other hand
, when
people
 go trip to another
country
 and learn the languages of peoples of that
country
 ,
firstly
 , there can speak fluency with native
people
 and learn about their
culture
,
secondly
 , he can find which behaviour is bad in their
culture
for example
 when speaking with
people
 about their
culture
 they can ask of the what is a bad effect in your
country
 and they
don’t
 do
this
.
finally
 , they understand what
people
 saying and they
don’t
 need help from everyone and can Fulfilling their needs. In conclusion, when
people
 going another
country
 ,they should know the
language
 which uses there .they should fulfil their needs and when
this
 is possible that they know the foregone
language
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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