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Governments should spend less money on restoring old buildings and more money for new housing and roads development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It had been observed that a certain number of people feel that the state should invest less amount in the restoration of old
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 and more funds should be allocated to construct the new one's
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 as well as the roads. I agree with the given statement to a large extent. My inclination will be elaborated on in the ensuing paragraphs.
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,constructing modern accommodation is a practical approach to meet the better demands of current society.
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, the ratio of population is increasing which is directly proportional to the construction of new homes
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, in metropolitan cities
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 as Delhi and Bengaluru, the population is inclined since people are shifting from different cities or rural areas because of mass opportunities and for new house or
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 is needed to accommodate
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 people.
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, developing access efficient highways and tolls are necessary to create effortless travel between the cities and suburbs.
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, building more good roads to create transportation easier and safer. As an illustration in ,2020 the government make a new highway between Meerut to Delhi now the travel time between Meerut to Delhi had decreased from 3 hours to 1 hour. To conclude, in my opinion, maintaining the historical
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 is necessary to preserve the arts and the story, but not as important as developing current infrastructure and roads for practicality and efficiency
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