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Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #internet
Some feel that
internet
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bring
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 about many problems. I
am totally disagree
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the
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 idea. Because the
internet
 plays an important role in
our
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 society we live in. There is a thin line between the
internet
’s advantages and disadvantages. People want to share what they do in a day with their friends. İt is a main contributing factor
of
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to
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 socializing. They communicate
each
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with each
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 other through many
internet’s
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internet
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 applications.
Also
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 they can get online education because of
plethora
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the plethora
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information
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of information
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 creators. They can reach any kind of
courses
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course
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 all around the world with
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the internet’s
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internet’s
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internet
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 applications.
In
addition
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 many thousands have benefited from
the
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apply
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internet
 access
since
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apply
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to get a world vision. Quickly accessing any sort of
information
 can lead to cause many
problem
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problems
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. The more
information
 we see the
more risky
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riskier
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 get
wrong
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the wrong
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information
. Many authorities have
launch
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 a full-scale investigation into protecting
information
. The biggest risk uses
internet
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the internet
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 is
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a virus
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virus
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viruses
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. If your system is not protected
any
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by any
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 program, you are in the risk group because of
virus
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the virus
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 threat.
Consequently
, The
internet
 is the biggest invention mankind has ever seen. It is
very
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a very
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 useful tool for everything. The future is uncertain but we cannot think
it
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of it
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 without the
internet
.
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  • Consumer behavior
  • Virtual marketplace
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
  • Comparison shopping
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  • Logistics
  • User interface
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