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Band 7.5

You want to work as a guide for tourists coming to your town. You have heard about a job with a tourism company. Write a letter to the manager of the tourism company. In your letter - say how you heard about the job - Explain why you would be a good tour guide - Ask some questions about the work.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my keen interest in the position of sightseeing tour guide recently advertised by your company. As a lifelong resident of Brampton with extensive knowledge of the region's key tourist attractions, I am confident that my experience and enthusiasm make me a strong candidate for
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 role. Brampton is home to many renowned destinations,
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 as Gage Park, Donald M. Gordon Chinguacousy Park, the Rose Theatre, Heart Lake Conservation Park, the Peel Art Gallery Museum, and The Big Apple Farm. I have visited these places on numerous occasions, both to expand my knowledge and to unwind from daily responsibilities.
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, I am familiar with broader regional landmarks like the CN Tower and surrounding points of interest, which
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 enrich my understanding of the local tourism landscape. I am a naturally outgoing and friendly individual, which allows me to interact easily with tourists and provide engaging, informative experiences. My diploma in Tourism and Hospitality has equipped me with a solid foundation in visitor engagement, destination knowledge, and customer service. I take pride in making guests feel welcome and ensuring they leave with lasting memories of their visit. I would appreciate the opportunity to learn more about your expectations for
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 role and to discuss how my background can align with your company’s goals. Please do not hesitate to contact me to arrange an interview at a time
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 convenient for you. Yours sincerely, [Your Name]

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task achievement
Consider adding specific questions about the work to engage the reader further and demonstrate your interest in understanding the role better.
coherence and cohesion
The organization is generally clear, but ensure each paragraph flows logically from one to another to strengthen your connections between ideas.
positive aspect
Your enthusiasm and knowledge of the local area are well conveyed, making your application compelling and relatable to the reader.
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The friendly and professional tone you maintained throughout the letter is commendable, aligning well with the expectations of the role.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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