Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good,while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Sports
is
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played all over the world. Some companies think that they can use
this
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these
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sports
as a way
advertise
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to advertise
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their
products
. While others think that it can be a bad idea. I am more inclined towards the former statement;
however
, both viewpoints will be elucidated in the subsequent paragraphs. On the one side,
firstly
, Some people think that
sports
can be
the
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good medium to promote their
corporation
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corporation's
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products
as it has
very
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huge audience.
Corporation
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Corporations
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use these
sports
to promote their upcoming
products
by giving stuff to
the
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famous athletes. To illustrate, Nike
promote
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promotes
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their Jordan 1 shoe by Michael Jordan.
This
helps them to increase the popularity of the
products
and
also
growth
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of the company.
Secondly
, it helps in promoting factory
product
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products
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at
global
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the global
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level. These promotions help
corporation
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corporations
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who
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that
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are in new international business and want to start their business
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on at
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at
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an
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international
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an international
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scale.
For instance
, DreamIpl
corporation
started their business by doing endorsements in cricket. Due to its high audience and viewership, they were able to promote
their
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its
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product at the global level. Today, they are known as one of the major
corporation
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corporations
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in the country.
On the other hand
, Many people think that promoting
in
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sports
can be very costly for new businesses and startups. Facilities
spends
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millions of dollars every year to endorse their
stuffs
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stuff
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. To elucidate,
Last
year Under Armour organization spend five hundred thousand dollars to endorse their
products
.
Moreover
, it can
also
lead to
unpopularity
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the unpopularity
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of the product which can lead to loss of the organization
Such
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as, In 2001, Reebok lost many dollars because
the
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player got injured while running in their shoes. In conclusion, I believe that it should be used as
a
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one of the
medium
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mediums
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to promote
products
because of its huge audience and fan popularity around the world.
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  • Sports sponsorship
  • financial support
  • athletes
  • brand visibility
  • awareness
  • commercialization
  • integrity
  • dependencies
  • corporate funds
  • unethical practices
  • strategic partnerships
  • communal relations
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