IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are infective, and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#trend #alternative #forms #medicine #methods #infective
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Treatment by traditional methods is not new, it is been for centuries. But with the development of science and technology، it is used has become rare and most of the time useless.
Although
Linking Words
 many cultures still believe it is effective and useable today. I radically disagree with that statement. In
this
Linking Words
,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
essay I will explain my viewpoint and lend my opinion. Undoubtedly, processing technology and science have changed the world a lot, but most materials and methods that were used previously are ineffective at
this
Linking Words
 time.
Therefore
Linking Words
, traditional therapy that was used to treat minor causes is now unable to deal with complex and invasive symptoms.
In addition
Linking Words
, many of the bacteria and germs that exist today did not exist three decades ago.
For instance
Linking Words
, herbal remedy is inactive with cancer and heart disease, which can lead to worsen the condition and become more dangerous. The
second
Linking Words
 important point is that the practitioners who deal with alternative medicine have not undergone university training and education.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, they only rely on what they have learned from their ancestors and a lot of unreliable information, and a lack of experience and skill. Another serious point I would like to say is that sterilization and infection control with alternative medicine is non-existent and unavailable, and modern equipment and devices are not suitable for
this
Linking Words
 type of treatment. The latest reports said that the communities that still use traditional medicine are separated by poverty and imposture and deception. In conclusion, when all things considered, I am convinced that these have positive as well as negative. I believe that humankind should be analysed which is good or bad for their strength.
Submitted by tahsinadam on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: