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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problerms are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive ora negative development?

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Today,a lot of people who feel a disease are trying to
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 traditional medicine and they want fewer go to usual doctors, I think that had a negative effect on their
health
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. People who are feeling ill should not
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 any ancient medicine and treatment without visiting a
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.
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, if they are using incorrect medicines and that caused another
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,
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 , they may think that they have a cold and
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 something for that but that wasn’t it and they are eating the wrong medicine.
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, maybe their
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 problems are serious and should be controlled by doctors before it's too late.
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 , using natural products without a
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's prescription has risks for us and they would bring a bad effect on our
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.
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, when our
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 is not completely good it is better that we are visiting a perfect
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 and see our
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, one reason is that doctors examine the conditions of our
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 ,for
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 , a blood test would require for finding the exact
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, our illness maybe not be a serious
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 and do not need any drugs.
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 ,we have a comfortable mentality that we do rational and correct work. In conclusion, when people are feeling have a
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problem
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 ,they do not
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 self-treatment and eat drugs that they think are useful for their illness,
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 , they should visit a good
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 and say their
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 to him.
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