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Some people think that the only way to judge someone’s success in business is by the amount of money they make. Is money a true indicator of the success of a business? In what other reason might success in a company be assessed?

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Financial
success
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 is often seen as an important indicator of
business
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success
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. The more
monay
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money
 someone makes, the more
success
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 they have in
business
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.
Money
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 is a quick and easy way to assess
success
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 in
business
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. It is a fact that a
lot
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 of successful people in
business
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 make good
money
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. If
money
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 is a sole and true indicator of
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 is questionable. In my
view
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success
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 in
business
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 or a
company
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 can be evaluated by a
lot
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 more factors than just financial reports. Depending on sectors of operation there can be a
lot
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 of valuable measurements to determine
success
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 a healthcare
business
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 can make a
lot
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 of
money
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 with mediocre but quick service while another
company
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 that
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truly
truely
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truly
 looks after patients and invests more time and
money
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 in resources and facilities could have better therapy outcomes and patient satisfaction. I do agree that financial health is a must to grow a successful
company
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 or
business
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 but there is a
lot
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 more to it than just counting dollars. Depending on the type of
business
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 there are a
lot
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 more factors to be assessed to determine the
success
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 of a
company
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