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University education is expensive, and not everyone can have university degree. Some people think that university should be free for everyone. Do you agree or disagree?

#university #education #people
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Nowadays, to get a university degree, students have to pay costly tuition
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. Not all of them can afford it, and,
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, a question arises whether education ought to be free for everyone or not. In my opinion, making studying completely free will not fix the problem, as there are multiple drawbacks to
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 approach.
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,
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 the
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 may seem unreasonably high, there is, in fact, a reason for it.
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, to operate,
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 need a reliable source of income, which is provided by students. A lack of finances can mean that
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 will have to adjust their budgets, which will inevitably lead to a loss in educational quality. Some might argue that governments can attempt to help finance
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,
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, states alone can not cover all of the spending, which is why
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 are so necessary.
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, if all
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 are made free, they will, likely, not be able to keep up with the increased demand for a university degree. Simply put, the competition in most higher educational institutions is fierce now.
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, Harvard's acceptance rate is only 4%,
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 for less prestigious
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 it is around 15%.
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. removing
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 will quickly make
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 run out of vacant spots, making it virtually impossible for average students to even get a chance to enrol.
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, the primary function of some
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 is to indicate the students’ status after graduation,
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, making them free will completely get rid of that feature.
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, some prestigious law firms only hire people who graduated from Oxford as a way of ensuring that an applicant has a wealthy background.
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, with education no longer tied to financial stability, all of that will become meaningless.
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although
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 making
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 free might sound appealing, the drawbacks that the decision will bring about, make
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 approach highly ineffective.
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relevant specific examples
Consider providing more specific examples to strengthen your arguments further. For instance, use data or real-life success stories where high tuition fees have led to better educational outcomes.
complete response
Avoid overly general statements, and ensure that all your points are backed by strong evidence or analysis.
introduction conclusion present
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion.
logical structure
Your main points are well-organized and logically flow from one to the next, providing a coherent reading experience.
clear comprehensive ideas
You have made a strong effort to address the task and provide comprehensive ideas on why university education should not be free.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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