Technology causes more problems for modern society than it solves. Do you agree or disagree?

With the high-tech gadget widely available nowadays, some argue that it brings more negative aspects than solutions. From my standpoint, I totally disagree with
this
idea. In terms of the disadvantages, I consider modern automation might cause 2 problems related to society.
Firstly
, children’s minds might be affected which will lead to severe consequences. Parents,
for example
, can be immersed in their smartphones due to the variety of entertainment like YouTube, and TikTok.
As a result
, lacking media management from adults can lead children to be attracted to violent games and bloody pictures on media, which could be a precursor to increased crime and violence.
Secondly
,
technology
usually motivates war and conflicts since it allows crime to create weapons. Terrorists will stand a chance to create toxic gases to attack an entire city.
However
, there are several benefits that come from machinery, which supports humanity in many cases. The
first
factor is the convenience of
technology
, take the Tesla subway,
for example
, a Metro train named Tesla invented by Elon Musk a brilliant
technology
that helped people to avoid traffic congestion in the city and cut down the emission to the environment.
In addition
, In many hospitals in
this
recent years, modern machines have become a potent tool to support patients' recovery from illnesses.
For instance
, ultrasound machines are used to update the state of the baby in the womb. In conclusion, despite some downsides of automation, I believe that there are uncountable merits that
technology
brings to humanity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenient
  • efficient
  • improved
  • communication
  • connectivity
  • advanced
  • medical treatments
  • saved lives
  • social problems
  • psychological problems
  • unemployment
  • income inequality
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