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new research shown that overeating has become bigger problem in the world than hunger . what are the reason of this problem ? how can solve it ?

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It is an undeniable fact that overeating is increasing
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 and which leads to health-related problems .
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, it can be detrimental to the human body .
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 essay will discuss both the causes and solutions to these problems .
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 with , nowadays there are many options are available in the market that can full fill the requirements of food. Another reason is that
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 become wealthier
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 and they are spending more on food.
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, the rate of glossy advertisements increasing at an unprecedented rate, which is
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 one of the causes of
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 .
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, there are many advertisements for pasta , sauces, and pizza which encourage
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 to consume them .
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 , many
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 consume more food to protect themselves against various diseases
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 as bacterial infection and all, and it leads to obesity
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 , which is a major concern in
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 world . I believe that government and individual efforts are required to overcome
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 issue.
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 of all ,
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 should avoid stress and adopt a healthy lifestyle . The government should raise public awareness about disease and complications. As well As , the government should ban advertisements which spread false information . In conclusion , I believe that overeating is a major
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 in a wealthy nation ,and both the administration and
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 should take responsibility to address
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 .
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 in the long, run
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problem
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 will create lots of problems and diseases. so it is the responsibility of all .
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