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new research shown that overeating has become bigger problem in the world than hunger . what are the reason of this problem ? how can solve it ?

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It is an undeniable fact that overeating is increasing
day
 by
day
 and which leads to health-related problems .
Hence
, it can be detrimental to the human body .
This
 essay will discuss both the causes and solutions to these problems .
To begin
 with , nowadays there are many options are available in the market that can full fill the requirements of food. Another reason is that
people
 become wealthier
day
 by
day
 and they are spending more on food.
Moreover
, the rate of glossy advertisements increasing at an unprecedented rate, which is
also
 one of the causes of
this
problem
 .
For example
, there are many advertisements for pasta , sauces, and pizza which encourage
people
 to consume them .
Secondly
 , many
people
 consume more food to protect themselves against various diseases
such
 as bacterial infection and all, and it leads to obesity
also
 , which is a major concern in
this
 world . I believe that government and individual efforts are required to overcome
this
 issue.
First
 of all ,
people
 should avoid stress and adopt a healthy lifestyle . The government should raise public awareness about disease and complications. As well As , the government should ban advertisements which spread false information . In conclusion , I believe that overeating is a major
problem
 in a wealthy nation ,and both the administration and
people
 should take responsibility to address
this
problem
 .
otherwise
 in the long, run
this
problem
 will create lots of problems and diseases. so it is the responsibility of all .
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