Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

people think
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make
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of wasting things they think
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for essential things. I cannot accept that opinion .
conversely
, To the best of my knowledge,
arts
could be medicine for the increase
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health. Mental health is
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the
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healthy life. When people have
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they could go to
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the museum, the
arts
and watching drama can make good mental health. another point is as
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think
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could be attraction subject for the tourists. because when the country developing tourist visit the country . it
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open way for the
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money
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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