The charts below show information about the participants in the Olympics from 1924 to 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show information about the participants in the Olympics from 1924 to 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows
information
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the information
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on the
number
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of Olympic
athletes
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from 1924 to 2012,
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the bar chart shows how many men and women competed.
Overall
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, the
number
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of
athletes
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competing in the Olympics has significantly expanded since it started.
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, there were always more male
athletes
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than female competitors, but the difference shrank dramatically over time as the proportion of female participants increased quickly. The bar graph shows that there were not many women competing, but by 1952, there were roughly 500 female
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.
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it peaked in 2012 at about 5000 after being under 1500 in 1984.
In contrast
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, the
number
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of men was significantly larger, starting at 3000 in the first year and rising steadily until it peaked at about 6000 in 2012.
According to
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the line graph, the first Olympics had participation from about 3500 participants.
This
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number
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increased steadily, reaching almost 6000 in 1984. The
number
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rose the most dramatically between 1984 and 2012, rising by 5500 and reaching fewer than 11500.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, athletes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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