Responsible tourists could preserve both the local culture and environment. Some people think it is impossible to be a responsible tourist. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are more and more chances for

tourist

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tourists

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to travel around the world due to globalization and transportation convenience. Some

people

think being responsible

tourists

who are aware of protecting local

culture

and

environment

is important and attainable while others think it is difficult to make it as responsible

tourists

. In my opinion, I

am agree

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with being a responsible

tourist

is necessary and every

tourist

should try to achieve it. Some

travelers

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believe that they

don’t

need to learn

the

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about the

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local

culture

and protect the

environment

for reasons.

Firstly

, they

don’

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don

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t have enough time to look around

tourist

spots, and it makes them have a quick visit.

Usually

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they have a tight schedule which not allowed them to talk to

locals

. They

don’t

have any connections with

locals

and

environment

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the environment

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Therefore

, they

don’t

care if they do something harmful

such

as throw away garages on the street, wear

heals

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or boots to harm the historic brick road, and say something rude to

locals

by accident.

Second

, the irresponsible

tourists

don’t

realize they should know more about the local’s history,

culture

and customs. If

tourists

don’t

collect enough information

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about

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local

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locals

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, they will do something wrong by accident. It will make

locals

frustrated and feel offended. It is a way to disturb and damage local’s life.

On the other hand

tourist

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tourists

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can do something to preserve the local

culture

and

environment

Firstly

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the traveler

a traveler

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traveler

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travelers

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can collect and learn useful local information before they visit the place. It is easy to find

custom

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customs

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, cultural activities and

environment

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environmental

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issues

about

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the

tourist

spots and get to know more about

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them

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before arriving there.

Hence

, the more

people

understand the place, the more respect they can give.

Secondly

, making schedules flexible is a way not to damage the local

environment

. If

people

have enough time to look around local places and talk to local

people

, they will be more aware of their own

behaviors

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Tourists

will have a connection with the

locals

, and

this

make

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them have

intention

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the intention

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to preserve the local places.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Responsible tourists could preserve both the local culture and environment. Some people think it is impossible to be a responsible tourist. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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