Responsible tourists could preserve both the local culture and environment. Some people think it is impossible to be a responsible tourist. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are more and more chances for
tourist
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tourists
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to travel around the world due to globalization and transportation convenience. Some
people
think being responsible
tourists
who are aware of protecting local
culture
and
environment
is important and attainable while others think it is difficult to make it as responsible
tourists
. In my opinion, I
am agree
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agree
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with being a responsible
tourist
is necessary and every
tourist
should try to achieve it. Some
travelers
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believe that they
don’t
need to learn
the
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about the
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local
culture
and protect the
environment
for reasons.
Firstly
, they
don’
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don
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t have enough time to look around
tourist
spots, and it makes them have a quick visit.
Usually
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they have a tight schedule which not allowed them to talk to
locals
. They
don’t
have any connections with
locals
and
environment
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the environment
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.
Therefore
, they
don’t
care if they do something harmful
such
as throw away garages on the street, wear
heals
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heels
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or boots to harm the historic brick road, and say something rude to
locals
by accident.
Second
, the irresponsible
tourists
don’t
realize they should know more about the local’s history,
culture
and customs. If
tourists
don’t
collect enough information
of
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about
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local
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locals
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, they will do something wrong by accident. It will make
locals
frustrated and feel offended. It is a way to disturb and damage local’s life.
On the other hand
,
tourist
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tourists
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can do something to preserve the local
culture
and
environment
.
Firstly
,
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the traveler
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traveler
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travelers
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can collect and learn useful local information before they visit the place. It is easy to find
custom
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customs
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, cultural activities and
environment
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environmental
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issues
about
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the
tourist
spots and get to know more about
it
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them
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before arriving there.
Hence
, the more
people
understand the place, the more respect they can give.
Secondly
, making schedules flexible is a way not to damage the local
environment
. If
people
have enough time to look around local places and talk to local
people
, they will be more aware of their own
behaviors
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.
Tourists
will have a connection with the
locals
, and
this
make
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them have
intention
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the intention
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to preserve the local places.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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