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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? đ What are the advantages of international communication online? Are there any disadvantages to this?

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The uptrend of online shopping by many human beings is a popular trend these days.In my point of ,view many
people
 are going to misuse modern technologies,call online trading.There are many advantages as well as disadvances we can find easily.In
this
 essay I will be discussing both points of view,I
also
 interpret worldwide communications are very helpful for our modern life. There are a number of positives side of using online buying,
firstly
save
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time
 and money.When
people
 buy online shops they can buy staying at home no need to go to the outdoor shops because of
this
 they save their transportation cost as well as their valuable
time
.,
Moreover
 they can do their important job during
this
time
.
Secondly
,there is another most important advantage is creating opportunities for new jobs.Nowadays
people
 are so busy they are unable to go outside shops for buying things they order online that's the reason the business going to grow and create more chances of working new person. On the other ,hand topic has some disadvantages like unnecessary buying things and waste of money.
People
 get comfortable staying home and buying goods,using their buying application.If
people
 are free they look at the application and look at many new things in applications they are going to order a product which is useless to them.On the other ,hand online shopping's biggest drawback is showing one thing and selling another, and
this
 causes many
people
 to look for beautiful products in pictures or videos when they get product quality is very poor. Now the world entered international globalization by using the internet,anybody can talk anywhere.We can find many advantages of international communication online one of them, is we can talk anywhere anyone within a
second
,with our relatives, and business partners.We can see news about anything happening all over the world.
This
 was the most important innovation by advanced earth.Everything that had rewards,we can find drawbacks as well .One of the
people
 started to miss the use of online communication the whole
time
 they engaged in phone and social media.They are decreasing their work performance as well as increasing the crime rate. In the conclusion online media, the internet, and online communication apps are beautiful creations of modern technology,they are helping us for
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easier and more comfortable life as well as getting international national news.
This
 is the most important responsibility of all of us to use correctly these technologies.
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