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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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As technology developed,
people
 can now travel to remote natural areas. While
this
 trend is beneficial to a certain extent. I would argue that its disadvantages are more significant. On the one hand, visiting natural places has some benefits.
Firstly
, travellers have a chance to acquire priceless information during the travelling period because
this
 activity enables them to discover new areas and animals. To justify my opinion, some famous writers have written their books by inspired nature.
Secondly
, travelling to the South Pole gives an opportunity for scientists in order to gain more knowledge about flora and fauna. They can find out new species that are unusual to the public.
Therefore
, these kinds of discoveries must be done so as to carry out new scientific studies.
On the other hand
,I believe that
this
 development has far more drawbacks. The
first
 one is that travelling could be dangerous for travellers who do not have enough data about the terrain.
In other words
, a vast number of visitors are not trained about the South Pole.
For instance
, the temperature is very low which adversely affects
people
's health.
Furthermore
, travelling to the forest can be perilous for
people
 because they can be faced with hunters
such
 as lions, tigers and so on. In order to avoid
such
 ,accidents all tours must be provided with a guide. To give a clear explanation for
this
, two Russian tourists were killed in Africa by predators
last
 year.
That is
 why all safety rules should be followed. To conclude, I firmly believe the disadvantages of
people
 being able to travel to remote areas outweigh its advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote natural environment
  • scientific research
  • climate change
  • environmental preservation
  • economic benefits
  • conservation efforts
  • habitat disruption
  • pollution
  • cultural disruption
  • indigenous populations
  • commercialization
  • safety risks
  • personal enrichment
  • ecosystems
  • awareness
  • appreciation for nature
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