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Artificial Intelligence will soon replace teachers in the classroom. Do you agree with this statement? What is an alternative to traditional face-to-face teaching?

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believe
 that A.I. could take the place of teachers In the near future.
This
 essay disagrees with
this
 statement because computers are not advanced enough yet and students can effectively use online
courses
instead
 of attending class. Computer learning is not at the stage yet where it can do the job of an effective educator.
This
 is because students require many things that a computer cannot provide,
such
 as feedback, emotional support and assessment. These soft skills are absolutely essential for the proper education of a child or adult and there Is no computer program that can compete with human beings In these areas.
For example
, Grammarly Is an application that can check for grammar errors but it falls short for English learners because it cannot tell someone what their main weaknesses are or explain why the mistake was made or how it can be fixed.
However
, online
courses
 can be used by teachers to improve lessons.
That is
 to say that they can enhance their ability to teach by using
this
 technology.
This
 allows the very best in their field to reach anyone in the world, record their lessons and provide interactive feedback.
For instance
, the very best universities in the world, namely Harvard and Stanford, now offer online learning platforms that allow anyone to enjoy their
courses
 for free and
also
 have the option of having feedback sessions with their tutors through Skype.
This
 does not replace the teacher but makes them even more effective and available to a wider audience.
Although
 neural networks have made great strides in the past number of years, they have not reached the point where they can educate at an effective level
due to
 lacking pedagogical skills.
However
, instructors can use these tools, particularly online
courses
, to enhance their teaching and help even more people learn.
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introduction conclusion
Your introduction effectively introduces the main idea, but it can be more engaging. You might want to start with a provocative question or a startling fact about AI in education.
coherence cohesion
While your essay is generally cohesive, the transition between paragraphs could be smoother. Try using transitional phrases and sentences to link ideas more clearly.
introduction conclusion
Your conclusion can be stronger by summarizing the main points more effectively and providing a final thought or call-to-action. This will leave a lasting impression on the reader.
task achievement
You have addressed the task adequately and presented clear ideas, but incorporating more specific examples and evidence would strengthen your argument further.
logical structure
You have a logical structure in your essay, making it easy for the reader to follow your argument.
task achievement
Your essay provides a balanced view by acknowledging the potential of AI while highlighting the indispensable role of human teachers.
relevant specific examples
The examples you have used, such as Grammarly and online courses from Harvard and Stanford, are relevant and help in illustrating your points.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Personalized learning
  • Administrate tasks
  • Customized feedback
  • Virtual reality
  • Immersive experiences
  • Online learning platforms
  • Massive Open Online Courses (MOOCs)
  • Blended learning
  • Social learning platforms
  • Community-based learning
  • Peer-to-peer interactions
  • Technological integration
  • Adaptive learning
  • Real-time data analysis
  • Scalable education solutions
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