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If a product is good can meet people's needs, people will buy it. Advertisement in the media is no more than form of entertainment. To what extent, do you agree or disagree with their opinion?

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Media
 is a good source of information ,
advertisement
 can
also
 be considered as a form of information about a
product
 or website . According to some folks if a
product
 meets public requirements
then
 they will buy it else not , and consider
advertisement
 nothing but a form of entertainment on
media
 .In my ,opinion
advertisement
 is a must for the sale of any
product
 and disagree with
this
 notion. The same will be discussed in the
further
 paragraphs with a suitable conclusion. Supporting my disagreement with the given statement , I firmly believe that most citizens try new things because they have seen them in the
media
 during the movie , online youtube lessons or at the time of other social browsing sites.
For instance
 , if ABC soap comes into the market
then
 no one is aware of that ,only after the
advertisement
 people will come to know about it .
However
 , I completely agree that the public will buy only if they need it but for their awareness that any
product
 is in the market
advertisement
 is a must.
Moreover
, people will buy only those stuff which they have heard of , for ,instance if a person is going to the market to buy toothpaste , and there are so many options in the supermarket ,
then
 it is a human tendency that will buy only those stuff which they have seen in the advert . No doubt , an advert seems more of an entertainment form , which is basically to attract the audience to buy their
product
 and for that they cast famous actor and do a lot of investment to create the good image of a new
product
. To sum up,
Although
 the public will buy only those things which they need advertisements can help by letting them aware of multiple options . In my opinion ,
this
 is the main role of
media
 in citizen's life to advertise their
product
 by showing the qualities of their
product
 rather than entertaining the public.
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