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Many people join distance‐learning programs (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people considered online learning a great educational platform, due to the fact that it is more affordable.
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, learning through the internet lessen
students
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' opportunity to access some academic materials that only
colleges
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 provide. In my opinion, I agree that attending college is a better option in terms of accessibility to more educational resources and enhancing social
skills
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. Admittedly, distance learning is a great platform for many
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 who can not afford to go to
colleges
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 or
universities
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, because it is cheaper than the traditional way.
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, parents don't have to spend money on uniforms or other material fees,
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, parents can save more money and spend on travelling with their child which is an important thing to improve their close relationship with parents. For these reasons, online learning is a good choice for people who want to spend more time with their children and save more money for something else.
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, studying in
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 or
universities
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 give more opportunity to access educational resources
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 as libraries.
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, it is a great way to improve
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' social
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 which are difficult to achieve from online learning alone. Many studies show that
students
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 who study in traditional schools have better social
skills
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 and be able to cope with problems in their future better than
students
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 who study online. For these reasons, attending
colleges
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 or
universities
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 is extending
students
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' possibility to improve their social
skills
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 and access more educational resources. In conclusion,
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 distance learning is more affordable, studying in
colleges
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 or
universities
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 is essential for developing their social and problem-solving skill which is hard to get from online learning programs.
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