Several people assert that the main cause of crime is an economically disadvantaged background. However, others say that crime is caused by a person's nature. Discuss both ideas and give your own opinion

#people #crime #background #person #nature

Some

people

believe that the main cause of

crime

is poverty while others think that

person's

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nature

result

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results

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crime

This

essay will discuss both views and shows my personal ideas. There are several

reseaons

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reasons

why

crime

caused by an economically disadvantaged background. The

first

thing is that

people

without

money

will hardly to keep their lives. If

people

do not have enough

money

, they will not maintain a standard life, which means they have no place to live and even can not feed themselves.

Therefore

, they will use various methods to get

money

, which

include

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illegal ways.

Secondly

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people

peopel

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people

can get rid of pressure, if they have

money

. When

people

have enough

money

, they could buy anything that they like.

For instance

, many

people

would go shopping when they feel sadness or depressed, because they can release these

negtive

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negative

negatives

emotions due to shopping.

Hence

, they will be more joyful, and they have lower motivation to

crime

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crimes

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Nevertheless

, person's nature

also

play a significant role in

crime

. Some criminals' personality lead them to commit crimes, and they did not commit crimes for

money

anythingelse

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anything else

. We can see a number of killers, they do not have

agrument

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argument

or hatred with victims, which means they only kill

people

for fun.

Also

, their are some

cirminals

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criminals

that have a bad

childrenhood

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childhood

children hood

or even abused by classmates. When they grew up, they are more likely to hate

the

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apply

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society

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and commit

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a crime

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crime

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crimes

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for

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revenge. In conclusion, i agree that both economically

diadvantaged

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disadvantaged

background and person's nature are essential cause of

crime

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economically disadvantaged
necessities
societal factors
external circumstances
criminal activities
intrinsic characteristics
personality traits
moral beliefs
psychological conditions
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personal choice
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proportion of males and females in Australia in different age groups who did daily exercise in 2010.

In many countries, the levels of obesity and related health problems are increasing rapidly. What do you think are the causes of this problem, and what solutions can you suggest?

Online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both society and individuals. To what extent do you agree.