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Nowadays many women are working a full-time jobs like men. What do you think about this phenomenon?

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In nowadays society, divorce has already become the most common solution for terrible marriages.
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, some professional talents believe that
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 are usually a victim of divorce
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most of
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 because they need to handle most responsibilities that come up with marriages including children, and
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 of parenting.
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, these single mothers will need to work just to sustain their basic living demands. In other aspects,
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's identity has already significantly improved over time passes. That means
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 have more opportunities to access a high-level education than having a successful career. On one hand,
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 phenomenon is mostly related to the huge pressure from sexual discrimination and expenditures. More specifically,
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 of
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women
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 to get full-time jobs like
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 because they need to be able to nurture their own children by themselves as well as provide a stable living environment for their children.
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, nowadays
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 are able to access an advanced education
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 as university, which brings them more chances to have a successful career just like what
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 held for
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 time. In
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 case,
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 are working full-time jobs like
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 seen as more reasonable. To conclude,
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 phenomenon directly reflects the idea that the identity of
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 not the same as it use to be, which bring them more opportunity to compete with
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 in their career. Despite
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, there still have some single mothers been forced to get
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full-time
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 because of poor environments around them.

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