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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world, Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to share freely. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is true that some
population
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populations
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 consider sharing as much
data
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 as possible in scientific, business, and technical sectors to be beneficial.
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, others think some knowledge is too precious or vital to be freely shared. In the following paragraphs, both views will be discussed in detail before reaching a conclusion. On the one hand, sharing all
data
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 in scientific, business, and technical sectors with the community is totally beneficial.
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, the new knowledge will assist people in preventing or better managing their lives, especially the
information
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 about healthcare, nutrition, and technology.
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, we are currently facing an outbreak of COVID-19, which was a problem that all countries had to deal with. Reporting new
data
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 about ways to take care of themselves in
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 situation would reduce the spread of
disease
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.
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, a lot of experiments lead to the discovery of new knowledge that will assist companies to develop their products and contribute to the market.
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 will improve the economies of countries.
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, some of the
information
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 is valued too much and shouldn't be free to the public, especially
data
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 that took a long time to gather and may have quite a high budget.
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, people can't imagine that if they share
data
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 in technological security systems with
society
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a society
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 that
this
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 source would be harmful to the community or damage some companies. In some aspects, it is an advantage to provide as much
information
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 as possible to the public.
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, we should
also
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 consider sharing some
information
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. Some of it is too valuable and crucial to be freely shared.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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