some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortages of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Many have different views when it comes to handling challenging events in daily life. Some
argues
working Change the verb form
argue
towards
making changes to counteract the bad effects while others support accepting things as they are and moving on. I am in agreement with the former view.
On one hand, demanding a better future has its own benefits. Change preposition
toward
Firstly
, the developments,
and innervations are founded by the very nature of humans who Remove the comma
apply
incline
to make advances in the standards of living. For, instance, Dr Louis Pasteur found the germ theory because he strived to tackle human diseases and help fellow beings to live without infections. Add a missing verb
are incline
Thus
, for the world to move forward we should not just be passive in face of adversaries. Secondly
, It would give a sense of hope and strength to sail across difficult times. Instead
of repenting and feeling beaten
up, if, someone works towards achieving a solution, that person would indeed be much at ease despite the outcome.
Add the auxiliary verb
beat
On the other hand
, there is only one reason many don't take any action in difficulties which is, being afraid of being hurt. When one rebels, demands, stand-up it is natural to sometime receive a reaction that we didn't dare to think of. Fear of the unexpected ocurrence
keeps us to comply with an absurd situation. Correct your spelling
occurrence
For instance
, many employees dare not raise their voices against discriminating employers because of the fear of losing their job. Even though,
doing so might put the worker at risk, there is a legal system that can be sorted to protect the victims.
In conclusion, working towards improvement has greater merits than being quiet. Remove the comma
apply
This
stems new creations as well puts
those who face adversaries more at ease. Despite negative backlash would be a side effect of raising against bad things, its benefits are far greater.Correct word choice
as puts
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