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Some cities create extra housing by building tall buildings. Other cities do this by building on wide areas of land. which do you think is the best solution for this problem of housing?

Housing for
people
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 in cities has been a topic of debate in many countries.
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people
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 prefer to stay in independent houses, it will become an obsolete thing in the future because of the limited availability of
land
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. Many activists have suggested accommodating these
people
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 in tall buildings rather than creating wide areas for housing by cutting down trees. I support the latter statement and believe it to be a better solution for
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 problem. Some cities create large amounts of
land
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 by wiping out their green cover to meet the housing needs of the increasing
population
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.
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,
this
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 horizontal expansion causes cutting down of trees and intrusion into animal territories.
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, we hear stories of animals entering
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cities
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 of humans
enroaching
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encroaching
 into their forests.
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, the housing need of the ever-growing
population
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 cannot be fulfilled as
amount
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 of
land
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 is limited. Environmentalists believe if a city needs to accommodate its
population
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, it should go vertically.
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,
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 will have a larger amount of
people
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 occupying a smaller area of
land
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.
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, there will not be a need to have wide areas of
land
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. Though
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 will result in the construction of concrete jungles , at least the human race will not have to destroy mother nature.
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 , it is better to build vertically than horizontally to solve the problem of housing. In conclusion, the problem of housing for the
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ever -increasing
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ever-increasing
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population
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 of the world needs to be solved by vertical expansion ,
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, by building skyscrapers because of the limited availability of
land
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.

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