Scientists predict in the near future cars will be driven by computers, not people. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

With the advancements in modern technology, the possibility of driverless
machines
has been increasing for several years. Experts in the automobile industry believe that factories could launch
auto
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that can be driven for various purposes without a driver. In my opinion, I think that it is a negative development overall because of some main issues that I will explain in
this
essay.
To begin
with, unemployment could increase in many regions across the world due to
this
automation.
This
is to say, a majority of the population work as a driver in huge enterprises so if these companies shift to digital vehicles, a threat of losing jobs for operators of these
machines
may arise in
this
sector.
For instance
, skilled employees are not trained enough for
this
kind of advanced technology.
Thus
,
instead
of allocating a budget for high-tech pieces of training, companies could simply buy advanced cars to perform duties, due to which, the number of jobs for drivers could reduce significantly.
Furthermore
, the number of car accidents may
also
rise exponentially.
This
is because
,
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not only digital malfunction is common in
such
kinds of technologies but
also
hackers can hack the computer programs of these vehicles.
As a result
, car crashes could happen either due to a problem with
machines
or purposefully by criminals. Despite these major concerns, it could be argued that corporations can save a huge amount of money by reducing their staff members,
also
machines
do not take sick leaves so no work loss is possible.
However
, these benefits are minor compared to the disadvantages of
this
trend of using driverless cars. In conclusion, scientific research is at a fast pace nowadays in the automobile category and engineers may develop automobiles without the need for individuals soon. In my perspective, I am convinced that the drawbacks like the chance of criminal activity and problems with operating machinery are far more significant that the advantages of
this
development.
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