In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.dicuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people you decided to do this

in some
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of the world ,young adults
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prefered to
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about
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year exploring before going to
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there are some advantages and disadvantages to
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. and
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them in more detail . on the
one
hand, there are two main
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benefits
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benefits
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this
.
firstly
,
one
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independent
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independent
and mature by spending some time working or
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.it can make them more aware of what they want in life .
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is important because statistics
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that about 60% of university students are unhappy and feel
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unfulfilled
with their major.
secondly
, working can make the person satisfied
finantcialy
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financially
financial
and not worry too much about
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funds .its true that it will not cover all the financial
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issues
but
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at least
atleast
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at least
it will give a sense of
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independence
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independence
.
on the other hand
,there are some
determental
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detrimental
consequences to having
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off
collage
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.
for example
one
can
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choose
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choose
chose
not to go to
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collage
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after all.
this
is because work can give them the money they need and travelling give them the fun they want .
as a result
,and at
this
level of immaturity ,the
dicision
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decision
to leave
collage
can be quite tempting .
also
being
one
year behind
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their
thier
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their
other peers can give them a sense of low self
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esteem
due to all of the
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academic
acadamic
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academic
lessons their
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took .another problem if
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they
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they
obt
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instance ,they may never get
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used
to being back to their normal
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quite
quiet
,
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stressful
life of the university . in conclusion .
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clear that there are
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and cons to
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the disadvantage
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outweigh
outweighs
the advantages
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